I couldn’t fall asleep. Every single word he said clung on to me, where was he? What seems of thousands of calls had all been sent to voicemail, a stab of nausea struck into my stomach every time he didn’t pick up. I was worried. Never in 6 years had we been apart for 24 hours; maybe it was over. A sudden surge of anger scampered into my heart: only to be buried with all my other emotions I wished not to feel. Suddenly a pool of blood came –staining the carpet- out of my wardrobe and when I opened my cupboard door…there his body motionlessly lay.
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Wow great story Issy! Very descriptive. Great job! I think you will make it in the show case.
Wow! Well done Issy, I really like the way you made my tummy all tense-and great punctuation. Well done.
That’s dark.
A very gripping story Issy, well done. sometimes I wondered about you order of words, but perhaps it adds to the effect.
its a realy good story
This is really good!
* It kept me gripped throughout!
*There are lot of short sentences which create tension!
WISH:I don’t have one!
WOW! That was amazing I loved it.
Woooooooowwwwwww your vocabuly is amazing!I’m blown away!!